How to Write Killer Services Descriptions: Five Mistakes and Their Fixes


You’ve managed to spark potential customers’ interest, and they’re seeking out specific information about the services your company provides. Terrific!

But before you count those chickens, better take the time to evaluate whether your next step puts you in the best light and entices those potential customers into becoming actual customers.

Enter the service description.

How a business presents its services to potential customers is of paramount importance. And you may get just one shot at it… The services description is where many miss the mark, leaving would-be customers confused, uninformed, or uninterested.

An effective service description provides customers valuable information about what your business offers and what they’re getting, including information about cost, timing, and process.

It’s also an opportunity to highlight what your business can provide to them that others cannot.

So here are five common service-description mistakes and traps, and suggestions on how to avoid getting caught in them.

Mistake No. 1: Too Long or Too Short

Too long, you risk triggering “glazed eyes” syndrome. Make customers work too hard, and they’ll get annoyed or lose interest, plain and simple. Or, worse yet, they may equate that experience with how you’d fulfill your end of the deal: long and drawn out.

Too short, and you may come across as curt, incomplete, or careless. None of which instills confidence.

The fix: Ensure your service description is complete but not tiresome. You may have only a few seconds to hold your viewer’s attention, so keep it concise.

Digital descriptions should require little to no scroll (mobile considerations aside). If your business uses hard copies for in-person meetings or as part of a sales kit, keep it to one page or less.

Mistake No. 2: Failure to Include Your Mission, Purpose, or Promise

Your website design is well constructed and includes comprehensive content. Among other valuable information accessible via the homepage is your company’s mission. Your purpose and goals are present and articulated.

However… there’s no carryover of that message where your service description appears.

“But we’ve already covered that,” you may say. “Must it really be restated?”

Yes! Omitting mention of your business’s reason for existence as part of your service description is a missed opportunity.

Moreover, there’s even the potential to appear impolite. Think about it: You’re saying, “Hire me.” The customer should feel enticed… yet comfortable that you’re not just about the transaction. You need to remind them that there are humans driving the process that care about the outcome and will work to ensure success.

The fix: If you haven’t yet zeroed in on a key expression or tagline that gets the gist across, summarize or rephrase your mission, purpose, or promise in a fresh way that captures the essence and communicates the main idea.

Doing so is an appropriate lead-in to a service description, re-emphasizing your brand’s message and promise. Though cutting to the chase may be inherently desirable, a simple rephrasing at the beginning or as part of the body of your service description reinforces the message, framing your services within customer-friendly context.

It may even act as a buffer, softening any overly logistical or fee-driven language, reminding the customer that your primary purpose for being is to be the solution for their business challenges.

Mistake No. 3: Under- or Over-Selling

A service description is the forum for laying your cards out on the table.

Some may feel a desire to pull back to take a more modest approach; as a result, they may leave things unsaid, increasing the potential to be overlooked or undervalued. Others may come across as too aggressive, and risk inflating capabilities or accomplishments.

The fix: Certainly, the messaging within your description should align with your brand’s voice and overall marketing and brand strategy. Other factors will also have an impact, such as industry and competitor considerations. However, work to find that sweet spot between too much restraint and not enough. Keep in mind there’s a difference between enthusiastic and overzealous.

Mistake No. 4: Lack of Continuity

Your service description jumps around too much; it’s disorganized or poorly conceived.

The fix: You’re looking for some level of order and cohesive flow. Consider the description a menu of sorts: Offerings should be appealing and clear, in an arrangement that makes sense. If you offer a wide range of services, categorize and group them.

Feel free to more prominently feature signature services or service packages, or those with the highest ROI. Then fill in the remaining services smoothly and in a logical progression.

Mistake No. 5: Boring!

That is… dull, drab, lifeless, rote.

True, a service description is utilitarian; but that doesn’t mean it should lack creativity, personality, or character.

The fix: Explore ways to express creativity, ingenuity, or (simply) an original perspective or outlook. To keeping the descriptions “clean,” play with format, design, and language. The result should make it clear that a high level of thought and strategy has gone into the service offering, with a good deal of flavor filtered in along the way.

Two Bonus Tips

1. Numbers are good

Using numbers to quantify your business’s experience, expertise, reach, or successes is a good way to simply but effectively convey that you are worthy of a new customer’s business. For example:

  • “We’ve supported over 4,500 customers across the globe to save over $ 5 billion in lost revenue.”
  • “With over 30 years in the business, we understand your needs.”
  • “Growing our subscribers to over 40,000…”
  • “Offering more than 20 products to over 250 companies…”

2. Transparency is valuable

Your customers want and deserve to have a clear understanding of what to expect from you.

Though it’s perfectly reasonable at this description stage to opt out of including pricing or details related to additional services, add-ons, customized arrangements, or special circumstances, be as up front as possible.

Even a twinge of evasiveness may send a potential customer packing.

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Position your business for success and demonstrate you value your customers’ time and attention by presenting an entirely clear, concise, and cohesive service description with a sensible, on-brand style.

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Social Media Fail: Bad Images and 11 Easy Fixes


You’ve heard it said that images and videos are the golden ticket on social media. Well, I must say I disagree. Good images are the ticket. That one little modifier—good—qualifies the whole idea. From Snapchat to Instagram to Twitter to Facebook, there are enough bad images floating around out there to make me want to scroll faster every time I get online. But take heart, finding good images and shooting good video are both within your grasp. Let’s take a look at 11 easy fixes to help you avoid the ho-hum of bad images on social media.

1. Make sure you use an image cheat sheet. Image holes vary so drastically from platform to platform that you need a guide to help you showcase your photos well. You want to avoid the cut-off heads and thumbnails with no clue of content. Some platforms have preview windows so make sure the best piece of the image shows in that window. Become an expert at cropping your images with a tool like PicMonkey (free) or Photoshop (paid). When I Googled “social media image cheat sheet 2015,” I got over two million results. Make sure you stay current—these sizes change from time to time. The few minutes it takes you to find and crop images for your various channels will be well worth it. Here’s one I have on my bookmarks bar from

As you can see in the example below from Twitter, preview windows often cut off any desire for users to click through as there is no clue what the image is about. Also, another fail here is a graphic that is vertical. Most social media platforms are wired for horizontal holes. Take the time to produce an image that will invite click throughs.

Clicked through image:

2. Take some time to learn how to shoot good photos. It won’t take a lot of time, but the investment in producing good images will pay off in more social sharing. You don’t have to become an expert photographer, but just get a basic understanding of framing, composition, lighting, background, and resolution.

2. Find some good tools for producing graphics. Not everybody can afford to hire a graphic artist. But tools like Canva (free) make it super easy to put together decent looking graphics. Canva also has an excellent tool called Design School that will teach you the basics of putting together a good graphic. Microsoft Publisher and Apple’s Pages are also good basic tools, but lack some functionality you may need. Give them a try and see if they work for you.

3. If you need stock photos for promotions or presentations, you will have to spend some money. Marketers know they are going to have to pay for important images. When it comes time to pick an image for a client’s work project or an important presentation, you’ll need to go to Shutterstock, istockphoto, Fotolia, or another site. There are several free image sites, but be careful. The quality and sizes might not fit your needs (see next point).

4. Avoid using pixelated images in graphics. Don’t be one of those people who takes a 200 by 300 pixel free jpeg image and blows it up to 600 by 900. What you’ll get is a mess that screams, “I don’t want to take the time to do this right.” It looks like a lazy afterthought. Oh, and I’ve been there and done that. 

5. Keep promotional videos short. Many of us use video these days to promote. These can be useful how-to videos, interviews, sports highlights, product launches, whatever. When I say short, I don’t mean Vine short (six seconds), but definitely think of television as your guide. Are you selling something, putting together a trailer, an event promotion? Make it less than 60 seconds.

6. Write a script and shot list (or storyboard) for your videos. It solves the guesswork issue and forces you to create a logical, engaging story. Even if it is just highlights from a press conference, it needs a beginning, middle, and an end for users to have a good experience. If you plan to use a lot of video, I recommend taking a short course or read a book on how to do it well. All these investments in your skill will pay off. The storyboard doesn’t have to be a formal, long document complete with pictures like this excellent (short) tutorial uses, but suffice it to say you need a plan to produce a good video. Start by just jotting the sequence down to make sure it flows. It will also save you time when you’re shooting the video whether it’s on your phone or a video camera.

7. Invest in a good intro/outro for your promotional videos. There are a number of companies that make customized video intros and outros for a lot less money than you think. I’ve used both IntroChamp and Splasheo. I know that Fiverr also has the service as well.

8. Always honor copyrights and usage terms. It’s really tempting to steal images off the internet, but don’t do it. If you are Googling pictures to use, make sure you don’t use copyrighted images without permission. Attribute sources and follow Creative Commons practices if needed.

9. When taking pictures of people, please make sure you can see their face and eyes. This wouldn’t apply to crowd shots obviously, but some people use crowd shots when they should be using an image with two or three people from the waist up. If you want to convey emotion, there is nothing better than a face to do that. Also, avoid “ants on the field” in action pictures and the backs of people—unless that is your subject.

10. Take it easy with animated gifs. ‘Nuf said. 

11. Always be thinking about the emotional reaction your image will solicit. Ask yourself what message will people take away from this picture–is there any emotion attached? Have you hooked their interest or given them something entertaining?

Bonus Tip: Don’t be afraid to stage good pictures. Some people think that feels fake, but that’s really nonsense. A good staged picture looks organic. Posing and staging are not the same thing. If you missed a great moment, try to recreate the moment. It will pay big dividends in social sharing. And isn’t that what we’re all aiming for?

Others in the series:

Social Media Fail #1: Tools Without A Toolbox

Social Media Fail #2: Who Are These People?

Social Media Fail #3: Data Without Analysis Is Just Numbers

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